I bet you in no time I will be walking underwater 30 feet down just as if I was walking on land.Here are rough draft pages for another comic I am drawing for release in 2010: THE WORLD WAR I WEB. He is just the man to have met to work on that apparatus for underwater breathing with me. Emile seems like an old lost friend who knows me and understands me, and now I know we can daydream exotic beaches, old familiar salty waves along the Riviera, and invest our souls in new building adventures. I am so elated to have found someone on the Richelieau who is so much like me. It functioned as a toothbrush, comb, and razor and yet not much larger than a toothbrush, and another gadget he brought out was a sort of disposable flashlight, that when the tab was pulled it gave off a very bright glow. One such gadget was like a jack knife but for toiletries. Perhaps we could use the same sort of system to regulate the oxygen a diver uses while underwater? He said that before the war he had been studying to become an engineer and he showed me some of the small little gadgets he had been putting together aboard the ship. He said he had been working on a “regulator,” which limited the amount of gas to a small explicit amount. He said that he had spent many nights awake thinking about the very same thing. I asked him if he thought we might ever be able to breathe underwater and how magical that could be. I told him that I had read Captain Cook’s logs of Tahitian sands kissed with the most crystal clear waters and for both of us we could clearly see in our mind’s eye the vibrant coral reefs. We talked about places we’d like to visit and little way off bays and harbors we’ve only read about in books. Anyways, my new friend and I started talking about all the possibilities the seas have to offer.
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He’s sort of a little man with a hefty chin and the lightest laugh that’s quite a contradiction to what you might expect. One of the men that works under my command is a gunsmith named Emile Gagnan, and he was telling me how he too used to swim the French Riviera as a boy out of Les Goudes just outside Marseilles. It’s like the doldrums have boarded, and amongst us naval officers we have exchanged books so many times that this is now my third read of Pilgrims Progress. All the men have cleaned and polished the battery and guns ready for combat but nothing comes. Here we are in support of the British and US Naval Forces for the war in the Pacific, but nothing exciting is happening. My goodness it has been so boring most of the morning. Use facts from the passage.įor the record… Sailors don’t journal, we keep a ship’s log! Prompt: Write a journal entry Cousteau may have recorded after he met Emile Gagnan. "Absolutely," Niko said as he pulled his phone out of his pocket. Last fall I didn't get a chance to play in the collected leaves my father rakes up and I was kind of bummed about it." Niko said, "Yeah, but at least I'll still have time to play and collect some of the orange maple leaves from my front yard. "The team is going to miss you this year," Geraldine replied.
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I told my parents that I'll just play baseball this fall." "No, I wanted too, but it was going to conflict with baseball. She asked, "Are you playing football, Niko?" She was nervous about running around on the field especially when it was so hot this past summer. "Oh, that's right," Geraldine remembered that her mother signed her up for flag football this year at Peck Park. "That's true," said Niko, "but I love the fall because it is football season." "I like the fall because we start a new school year," Geraldine said. The freshness of the air seems to be cleaner and less stuffy than the sweltering heat of summer, and some of our trees leaves start to change color in preparation for the winter months. Ii) Imagined but necessary to help the reader understand your story betterĤ) Use the exact dialogue unique to each character.Ī) Characters use words, phrases, and tone that show their personalities.ī) Explain why characters act the way they do.ħ) Climb inside the moment and write within the narrator's point of view.Ĩ) Craft a memorable lead to begin your narrative.ĩ) Craft an ending that delivers a powerful message:Ī) Something you learned or you now understand better as a result of the experienceġ0) Be sure to write your story with your own unique voice.ġ1) Use the "Narrative Writing Checklist" to ask and plan your next steps as a writer.įall is such a beautiful time of year because like most Californians we have suffered through the extreme temperatures of summer.
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1) Think of a person, place, or moment in your life that matters and write a story.Ī) Ask what is my story really about? Include descriptions, dialogue, and inner thinking thatĢ) Focus on one episode and write with detail.ģ) Help readers picture the episode with the small actions of the moment.Ī) Zoom in on small powerful details that capture big moments and feelings.